In the previous chapter, I told you what makes a good resume, and it was things like conciseness, structure, accomplishments, and so on. But seeing a bunch of A+ resumes does you only so much good.
In this chapter, I'll walk you through some sample resume excerpts and show what could be improved about them.
When you are reading these, first study the original resume and see if you can diagnose the issues.
This candidate applied for a position as an account manager.
This candidate has described her job responsibilities, which isn't all that useful. Responsibilities only tell us what she was instructed to do. It doesn't tell us if she was actually successful in them. Additionally, responsibilities are often fairly obvious from the job title, so describing them really doesn't offer much value.
Additionally, if you look at what she said, it's a bit fluffy and ambiguous. Cultivated client relationships? What exactly does she mean by that?
It would be better if she said something like this: